#ows is growing. We will be in a thousand cities in this country by the end of the month - hundreds of cities in other countries. We will see General Assemblies on six continents.
Liberty Square has grown exponentially over the last three weeks. It is time to form a second General Assembly in Manhattan. We expect more to follow.
On October eighth at three in the afternoon a General Assembly will convene in Washington Square Park. At the same time Anti-Flag will play an acoustic set in Liberty Square in solidarity with our movement's expansion.
We are growing. Block by block – city by city. We will see change in this country, in this world. It will happen sooner than you can imagine.
This general update, posted on occupywallstreet.org, achieves its goals of informing the public of the movement’s activities and attempting to get people to sympathize with their cause.
Occupy Wall Street creates a defiant, revolutionary tone. Short, direct sentences help the writer accomplish this. Sentences like “We are growing.” and “We will see change in this country, in this world.” create the sense that Occupy Wall Street is some kind of unstoppable revolution. The use of “We” is inclusive, adding to the effectiveness of the syntax by implying that the movement includes the reader. These techniques are very effective in creating tone.
This post offers information in a way that is consistent with its tone. All information is condensed into two sentences that are powerful and easy to read. In them the author uses simple language. The tone of the writing is not lost here. “in solidarity with our movement’s expansion” is added to the second sentence, keeping this section consistent with the rest of the post.
I appreciate the time aspect of your analysis. I think that all of these ideas could be expanded upon more than it is. I think also that there are some aspects of poetry that can be noted more on such a short piece that is set up the way it is.
ReplyDeleteI really like your choices for the closed reading. From a peer-reviewer perspective, I appreciate that the pieces you chose aren't excessively long, but also I find it helpful that you include them in your post. I like how you use the word "revolutionary" to define the occupy wall street diction- I feel like this fits well. Furthermore, I think that it's unique that you blend all of the techniques together while creating your piece instead of separating each technique by paragraph. I feel like that allows your readers to better understand the tone you are trying to illustrate.
ReplyDeleteI agree with your assessment of syntax and that it creates a powerful message, and I also think that it's militaristic sounding in its commanding orders. I appreciate your choice of covering current news and events.
ReplyDeleteCassidy Murphy